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First Post [Sep. 17th, 2006|04:36 pm]
Brilliant Brevity


You do not know the depths of my consciousness. The sinking feeling as my floating thoughts get darker and darker. There is a grimy feel to my depths: a stickiness that won't leave and builds as i go deeper.
-A Darkling's Fire

From: confusedone
2006-09-18 04:39 am (UTC)
I like the word choice is the last sentence, but the second is a fragment. I'd separate the first two sentences with a dash instead.
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[User Picture]From: bfluker
2006-09-20 12:25 am (UTC)
thank you. I can't believe i missed the fragment. Also, I'm going to try to figure out what the rest of this story is.
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